WRITING INSTRUCTION
- Part of good writing is writing systematically. Let's use the TIED paragraph structure to create a check list of good paragraph writing.
Journal 22: TIED Paragraph Notes & Practice
Using the questions from Chapter 9, transform two of the J21 answers into TIED paragraph format. Then highlight the four parts.
Example TIEDIED paragraph:
Doc’s spirituality is more persuasive than Mom’s due to the fact that he is more supportive and playful. When Doc speaks to Peekay about the fearful theology of Christianity, he says that, “God is too busy making the sun come up and go down and watching the moon float just right in the sky to be concerned with such rubbish” (189). Doc’s perspective is supportive and sets Peekay at ease by describing a more loving side of God. The support continues not just in idea but in tone with playfulness. Again, Doc uses religious vocabulary to unseat fear and address camouflage. “To be smart is not a sin. But to be smart and not use it, that, Peekay is a sin. Absoloodle!” (178). Doc’s playful use of “Absoloodle” helps to lighten the serious worries of a child and communicates in away that Peekay can understand.
Using the questions from Chapter 9, transform two of the J21 answers into TIED paragraph format. Then highlight the four parts.
Topic Sentences
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T: The topic sentences lets the reader know what your subject is and what you are going to prove. Never use "I" or talk about the essay/paragraph in this sentence.
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Introduce Evidence
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I: After the topic sentence, you should introduce the context of your evidence (or quote).
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Evidence
(this could be a quote
or logical reasoning)
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E: In a Literary Response essay (the type we are working on), this is the quote that demonstrates your point.
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Discuss (aka commentary)
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D: You must discuss how the evidence is important in proving your argument as stated in the Topic sentence or Thesis. (This element ties the paragraph into a circular unit in which the topic sentence is effectively proven with evidence and author commentary.)
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*If you want to include more quotes, simply repeat the IED portions for each quote.
Example TIEDIED paragraph:
Doc’s spirituality is more persuasive than Mom’s due to the fact that he is more supportive and playful. When Doc speaks to Peekay about the fearful theology of Christianity, he says that, “God is too busy making the sun come up and go down and watching the moon float just right in the sky to be concerned with such rubbish” (189). Doc’s perspective is supportive and sets Peekay at ease by describing a more loving side of God. The support continues not just in idea but in tone with playfulness. Again, Doc uses religious vocabulary to unseat fear and address camouflage. “To be smart is not a sin. But to be smart and not use it, that, Peekay is a sin. Absoloodle!” (178). Doc’s playful use of “Absoloodle” helps to lighten the serious worries of a child and communicates in away that Peekay can understand.
HW: Read Chapter 10 and complete J23.
Journal 23: Write a TIED paragraph using a quote as your evidence. You only need one quote. Please answer one of the following questions:
Journal 23: Write a TIED paragraph using a quote as your evidence. You only need one quote. Please answer one of the following questions:
- What do you guess are the wolves that Doc mentions?
- Why is Doc so nervous about the concert?
- What pressure (or societal significance) is riding on this concert?
- How does this chapter portray the motif of "finding a voice even when you've been silenced"?
