Wednesday, December 11

Block Day, Dec.12-13 ~ Essay Practice and Advent!

First, practice! Then a wee little partay. 

Excerpt from Bird by Bird by Anne Lamott

    Some days there seems to be little reason for hope, in our families, cities, and world. Well, except for almost everything. The seasons change, a bone mends, Santa Rosa rebuilds after the fire. In the days after a cataclysmic school shooting, thousands of students took to the streets and the public squares. They got us back up onto our feet and changed the world.
    Still, we hold our breath. In times of rational and primitive fear, hope has to do push-ups out in the parking lot to stay pumped—and it does. More and more, one hears Dr. King quoted everywhere, of finite disappointment versus infinite hope. Science, art, community, and nature make manifest that bad will or mistakes can lead to progress, like Bob Ross on his show The Joy of Painting reminding us that when we make big mistakes on canvas, we can turn them into birds—“Yeah, they’re birds now!”
    In my current less-young age, I’ve learned that almost more than anything, stories hold us together. Stories teach us what is important about life, why we are here and how it is best to behave, and that inside us we have access to treasure, in memories and observations, in imagination. This is what I want to teach the little kids in my writing class, along with the most important thing anyone ever told me: Almost thirty years ago, when I called my mentor Horrible Bonnie at my most toxic and hysterical, having screwed up as a mother, she said to me, “Dearest? Here is the secret: You are pre-approved.” I kept asking her, “Really?”
    This is what I want to teach my niece and my grandson, too, my Sunday school kids, my dearest children, that they are pre-approved. This is a come-as-you-are party. Who they were in utero, in kindergarten, in high school, in bed last night, was the very best they could be at the time; was in fact the only way they could be at the time. It is okay for them to make bad mistakes and decisions, to write ghastly first drafts. Hey, they’re all birds now.
    Hope changes as you get a little older, from the hope that this or that happens, to hope in life, old friends, laughter, art, goodness, helpers. I hope and am amazed, some early mornings, at just finding myself alive. I thought as I approached eighteen years old that I was a goner for sure. And here I am, still alive, still here, and often in a good mood. Other early mornings? Not so much. My back aches, my vision fades, I can’t concentrate. It’s like in the Samuel Beckett novel—“you must go on, I can’t go on, I’ll go on.”
    Of course, we are reduced at times, late at night, no matter how deep our faith in God or Goodness or one another, to quavering aspic. No matter how beautiful our views are of trees and birds and children, there are such scary pronouncements from Washington or our doctors that we can’t help hearing the descending tones, of age, global warming, the ticking of the nuclear clock, the heartbeats of the 7.6 billion other people around us. This stuff is scary and it’s very real. Yet hope is real, too.
    Our minds are hardwired in many ways to do many things, only half of which from my observations are self-destructive. We can walk without thinking about how we do it, and stay upright. (Well, most of us can, most of the time.) We can recognize a face from the past in a fraction of a second. Our minds can instantly determine whether that face is “friend,” “foe,” or “unknown” in that same fraction. But if it is someone we’ve been introduced to that day, we might not be able to remember the person’s name ten minutes later. Most of our brains are very good at some things but not so good at others, prewired for certain tasks but not for everything, good enough for most of us and definitely for government work. And then there are the artists, musicians, scientists, painters of light, and physicists—Caravaggio, Rumi, Einstein. As soon as regular people like me can grasp that light is particles, like specks of sand, or that light is waves, like the ripples in water, then scientists step in and prove not only that light is both, but that when we observe light, we change it. I mean, come on, now.
    Life is way wilder than I am comfortable with, way farther out, as we used to say, more magnificent, more deserving of awe and, I would add, more benevolent—well-meaning, kindly. Waves and particles, redwoods, poetry, this world of wonders and suffering, great crowds of helpers and humanitarians, here we are alive right now, together. I worry myself sick about the melting ice caps, the escalating arms race, and the polluted air as I look forward with hope to the cleansing rains, the coming spring, the warmth of summer, the student marches. John Lennon said, “Everything will be okay in the end. If it’s not okay, it’s not the end,” and as this has always been true before, we can hope it will be again. We have all we need to come through. Against all odds, no matter what we’ve lost, no matter what messes we’ve made over time, no matter how dark the night, we offer and are offered kindness, soul, light, and food, which create breadth and spaciousness, which create hope, sufficient unto the day.

Prompt: How does Anne Lamott's tone change in the excerpt above? (TIEDIED paragraph w/well-integrated quotes please).


Checkpoints:

  • No summary?
  • Does the topic sentence answer prompt question? 
  • Evidence (quotes) prove topic sentence? 
  • Correctly formatted quotes? (pretend it is all from page 1.)
  • Discussion explains how the tone is revealed in the text?

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Advent partaaaaay! 

Image result for advent

Isaiah 11:1-2 
(This is the Jesse tree scripture, the promise of a savior from a nation that has been "cut down." I think of this when I decorate my Christmas tree.) 

A shoot will come up from the stump of Jesse;
   from his roots a Branch will bear fruit.
The Spirit of the Lord will rest on him -
  the Spirit of wisdom and of understanding,
  the Spirit of counsel and of power,
  the Spirit of knowledge and of the fear of the Lord
(and it goes on to talk about the righteousness of the savior, that he will be a just judge and will bring peace and unity to people.)



Advent is about believing that whatever seems impossibly broken and done is not done. 
Something can grow from death... 
Beauty can come from ashes.
New life instead of mourning for loss.
Joy instead of depression.
Strength in our weaknesses.
Purpose instead of despair.



Isaiah 61-1-3  (Drop the mic scripture... Jesus claims it as his calling.)

The Spirit of the Sovereign Lord is upon me,
  for the Lord has anointed me
  to bring good news to the poor.
He has sent me to comfort the brokenhearted
  and to proclaim that captives will be released
  and prisoners will be freed.
He has sent me to tell those who mourn
  that the time of the Lord's favor has come,
  and with it, the day of God's anger against their enemies.
To all who mourn in Israel,
  he will give a crown of beauty for ashes,
  a joyous blessing instead of mourning,
  festive praise instead of despair.
In their righteousness, they will be like great oaks
  that the Lord has planted for his own glory.

When we take on the image of God, it becomes our calling too! 
May you be a great oak planted for God's glory and for HOPE. 


Want a free Advent Devotional? Check out The Greatest Gift by Ann Voskamp or one of these free ones. John Piper or one of these.

Wednesday, December 11 ~ Short Stories Due!

Take a minute now to enter your story into turnitin.com (10 points).

Take 10 minutes to double check your journal with the Journals Tab.

Shall we begin reviewing with Kahoot?

Tuesday, December 10

Tuesday, December 10 ~ Peer Editing Day

Short Story Rough Drafts due today!!!

SHORT STORIES
Click here for the Peer Edit Review Sheet.
  • Goal: at least 3 editors!
  • Have each one sign at the bottom of the page and make edits on your doc.
Here is the original assignment.
And here is the rubric.

A few things to check for....
  • basic grammatical errors
  • coherent sentence structure
  • paragraph flow (is the story easy to follow and broken into manageable paragraphs)
  • consistent narrator (is it clear when the narrator is talking vs. when a character is talking?)
  • Are there any inconsistencies in the plot or in general?
  • What is the noble theme behind this story?
  • How could this story be made richer or more enjoyable?

Friday, December 6

Monday, Dec.9 ~ Forbidden Words

First, give me feedback and advice
Click here for Renard
Click here for West

Review
  • Review STEAL chart.
  • Map your story by the plot structure. 

Some good writing tips...

Journal 42: Lame words
Come up with three synonyms for each of the lame words below. 
  • Nice
    Very
    A Lot
    Such As
    Stuff/ thing
    Something
    Really
    Plus
    Even
    Just
    Like
    Got
    Get
    Kid
    said 
    So
    Why
    It

Now take a minute to read whatever you have written of your short story and eliminate the forbidden and lame words.

HW: Short Story Rough Draft due tomorrow!!! 

  • Digital version is okay.
  • You must have at least two full pages in MLA format to get full points.
Journal Checks on Friday
  • Check over these if you have time today.

Thursday, December 5

Block Day, Dec.5&6 ~ Dialogue Day!

GRAMMAR
Practice rewriting these sentences for Active Voice.
  1. The file was studied and compliments were given by the director.
  2. The child was bitten by his friend at the daycare.
  3. The essay was forgotten this morning. 

SHORT STORIES
First...a few check points for your story.
 Here is the rubric once more.
  1. What point of view are you using to tell your story? (first or third person)
  2. What time tense are you using? (Most stories sound pretty well when told in past tense... Whatever time tense you chose, stick to it!)
  3. Have you covered each of the plot steps in your story?
  4. Is there a clear message in your story? 

SHORT STORY NOTES: DIALOGUE


      "Hi Tony," said Katy.

      "Hey," Tony answered.

      "What's wrong?" Katy asked.


      "Nothing," Tony said.


      "Really? You don't act like nothing's wrong."

Pretty tiresome dialogue, right?

Instead of writing a dialogue like the one above, a writer could condense the scene:

       "Hi Tony."

Tony looked down at his shoe, dug in his toe, and pushed around a pile of dust.

       "Hey," he replied.

Katy could tell something was wrong.

Formatting Tips
Rule 1. The first thing to remember is that punctuation goes inside quotations.
    "I can't believe you just did that!"
Rule 2.  Dialogue tags (the he/she said of the quotation) SHOULD BE USED SPARINGLY. The dialogue and narration should be used to show the emotion or action stated in the tag. One of the most important rules of writing fiction is: show, don't tell.

DON'T DO TOO MUCH OF THIS:
"But I don't want to go to sleep yet," he whined.

TRY THIS INSTEAD:
He stood in the doorway with his hands balled into little fists at his sides. His red, tear-rimmed eyes glared up at his mother. "But I don't want to go to sleep yet."
*A good writer will describe the scene in a way that conjures the image of a whining little boy.

Rule 3.  Paragraphs are very important to the flow and comprehension of the dialogue. Remember to start a new paragraph each time the speaker changes within the dialogue. This helps the reader know when someone new is speaking (and who it is).

EXERCISE: Children's Books Review
  • Read at least three kids' books and answer the questions below.
Journal 41
Story 1: (Name story here)
  1. Describe the theme/lesson
  2. What kind of narrator is being used?
  3. What other features are present in this story? (allegory, allusion, anagnorisis, atmosphere, archetype character, dialogue, flashback, foreshadow, indirect/direct characterization, irony, motif, symbolism, open/closed ending, unreliable narrator)

Story 2: ....repeat for three stories....
Story 3:

HW: Finish your short story!

  • Rough Draft Bring a digital copy of your story on Tuesday for peer editing. Credit will be given only for completed rough drafts (2-5 pages, double spaced).
  • Want to see an example of a story written for this class that won a writing contest? Click here.



  • Final Draft due as hard copy and on turnitin.com on Wednesday, December 11.

Tuesday, December 3

Wednesday, Dec.4 ~ "By the Waters of Babylon"

GRAMMAR 
Practice rewriting the sentences below in Active Voice.
  1. Teachers can be assisted by TAs for only one period a day. 
  2. We were bitten by mosquitoes at the lake.
  3. My wallet was found on the street.


SHORT STORIES
Story #7:  "By The Waters of Babylon" by Stephen Vincent Benét



Journal 40

1. To understand what is really happening in this story, you have to draw conclusions based on the writer’s clues and your own experience and knowledge. What do you think John is really seeing (and how are you able to tell) when he describes each of the items below? (You might want to work with a group to solve these puzzles.) 
  • the Great Burning
  • Ou-dis-sun
  • the statue of a man named ASHING
  • the temple in mid-city with a roof painted like the sky at night
  • the caves and tunnels where John thinks the gods kept their slaves
2. What is the narrative perspective of this story?  How does this perspective play a role in the reader's experience and theme of the work?


3. Explain how the words of Psalm 137, verses 1-6, connect with Benét’s story. 
  • "Longing for Zion in a Foreign Land"
    By the rivers of Babylon,
    There we sat down, yea, we wept
    When we remembered Zion.
    We hung our harps
    Upon the willows in the midst of it.
    For there those who carried us away captive asked of us a song,
    And those who plundered us requested mirth,
    Saying, “Sing us one of the songs of Zion!”
    How shall we sing the Lord’s song
    In a foreign land?
    If I forget you, O Jerusalem,
    Let my right hand forget its skill!
    If I do not remember you,
    Let my tongue cling to the roof of my mouth—
    If I do not exalt Jerusalem
    Above my chief joy.
4. Benét wrote this story in 1937, before the first atom bomb was invented. World War II and the Cold War are over now. Do Benét’s warnings about the complete destruction of a civilization still have relevance today? Why? 


HW: Complete J40

Monday, December 2

Tuesday, Dec.3 ~ A Piece of Chalk

GRAMMAR NOTES
Active vs. Passive Voice

Please forgive Grammar Badger's bad manners...


SHORT STORY VOCAB:
  • Atmosphere - tells us the way a story makes the reader feel. Word bank. 
  • Tone - tells us the attitude the narrator has toward his subject and us.  Word bank.
  • Theme - a central idea or statement that unifies and controls an entire literary work. For our purposes, a theme should be a lesson or insight.
  • Motif - a recurring element, such as an image, reference, or even phrase which reveals the theme of the story.
  • Foreshadow - a hint within the text about what will happen later. 
  • Flashback - a method of narration in which present action is temporarily interrupted so that the reader can witness past events - usually in the form of a character's memories, dreams, narration, or even authorial commentary. 
  • Practice: What motifs, theme, and foreshadowing have we seen so far? 

Short Story #6: "A Piece of Chalk" by G.K. Chesterton
  • G. K. Chesterton (1874--1936) is staying at a house (perhaps a friend's?) in the country and decides to go out on the downs (rolling grass hills) to draw. While drawing he shares some deep thoughts about life. 
    Journal 39
    • Motif: What is Chesterton revealing with the repeated contrast of white vs. other colors?
    • Atmosphere: What feelings communicate to you?  Is this a scary environment?  A safe environment?  A jovial environment?  Is this a dull world of walking and chalk?  A wonderful world of walking and chalk? A deadly world or walking and chalk?
    • How about a word bank? Click here. 
    • Tone: How does it seem Chesterton feels about what he is writing on?
      • Would you like another word bank? Click here.
      • What is Chesterton's attitude toward brown paper?  Nature?  The color white?  White chalk?  England, generally?
      • How does Chesterton seem to view the reader?  Does he seem to be an intellectually superior Brit?  Does he seem timid?  Does he seem frank?  Do you picture him smiling or scowling or laughing or sneering or blankly staring? 
    HW: Complete J39 

    Monday, December 2 ~ Welcome Back!

    Sociology Survey to help a student


    ROOTS
    • nomen, nomin - name
    • ped, pod - foot
    • graph, gram - write, written
    • aud, aus - hear or listen
    • scope - see, watch


    SHORT STORIES
    EQ: How are your short stories coming along? 


    Short Story #5 - Lamb to the Slaughter by Roald Dahl

    Journal 38
    •  Curious about the author, Roald Dahl. Click here 
    •  Define irony. What are the THREE types of irony? Record these in your journal.
    Three Types of Irony

     J38 continued

    1. Explain how each type of irony is evident in the story. 

    2.  What influence does Mary's pregnancy have on the story?

    3.  Why is Patrick's profession important?

    4.  Reminder, what is a literary allusion: What is the origin and meaning of the title "Lamb to the Slaughter"? Why is it significant? 

    5.  Why does Mary insist the police eat the leg of lamb?


    HW: Complete J38 and continue working on your short story.